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    dots Submission Name: Lostdots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Fanfic/Serious
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    dotsLostdots
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    I've lost all hope,
    given in,
    given up,

    I have!
    How the hell can you NOT?

    Took the deception,
    Accpeted the lies,
    Believed all you said,

    All for what?
    To put you behind the bars that now acompany you every night you sleep,
    and every morning you awake?
    To provoke a converstation knowing the outcome...
    will have you admiting your sins,
    while unknowingly being recorded...

    Yet at one point in this life,
    you were my everything!
    A father I never had,
    a friend I always wanted,

    Now you...
    you are...

    I am unsure at this point!




    Submitted on 2009-10-13 06:51:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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