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    dots Submission Name: Serves us welldots

    Author: dthforeverpain8
    ASL Info:    17/Female/TMON
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 112/217/289
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsServes us welldots

    Look right past me
    Thatís all Iím asking
    Believe me it serves you well
    Have you ever thought
    That maybe Iím not
    Just a crazed bat out of hell?

    Iím both broken and empty
    From the sorrow that you lent me
    And some say it serves me well
    That soon after you left
    I couldnít catch my breath
    And down into the depths I fell

    You fooled me again with your honest eyes
    I tore off the mask, you were my disguise
    And some say it serves us well
    Because of our flaws
    And our unhinged jaws
    We dropped off the earth without stories to tell

    Submitted on 2009-10-13 07:02:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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