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    Author: XxSkyelerxX
    ASL Info:    12/Female/Varies
    Elite Ratio:    3.59 - 11/19/11
    Words: 46
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
    Total Views: 70
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 398



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    Feather touches, soft, light,
    Across my skin, my lips, my eyes.
    Breathing in,
    Spices, perfume, smoke, herbs,
    Dazzling radiance.
    Unspoken thoughts,
    So simple,
    Whispered in her touch.
    Gentle breath,
    Heat caressing.
    No need to speak.
    One kiss.
    Two hearts.
    One word.


    Love.





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      Love is something rough, sex cannot be love, whispered touches in the night will not be yours. To think of love in this fashion is to be deluded by the harshness of life.
    It reminded me of a love, that forever went missing, after the same words were spoken by the same thoughts. Two beings so intertwined it scared one, who upon realization took distance, the love hurting and tainting that which was inside.

    Two lovers that do not speak, abide only by sex and feral touches, they say goodbye; not hello. They know their love is ending and might end any moment. They cherish the calm before the storm.

    That is what I think, your poem is about.
    | Posted on 2009-10-20 00:00:00 | by Urisen | [ Reply to This ]


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