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    dots Submission Name: His Depressing Smiledots
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    Author: Katsi039tsahente
    Elite Ratio:    1.7 - 4/17/25
    Words: 143
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
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       if people can face there problems even just a little it will help a lot, maybe not today, but it will help in the long run.


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    dotsHis Depressing Smiledots
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    you sit there with that smile.
    as big as who know what?
    you think that no one see it,
    you think that no one knows
    that what you did was sick and depressing.
    and you killed us a little on the in side,
    you will never be forgiving,
    you might as way just die.
    you shamed all the people,
    that were around you.
    so now your alone and forgotting.
    so you sit there with that smile,
    when you think of what you did.
    and people know what you did,
    and they see that smile.
    we hold are heads up high,
    to prove that were in control,
    and to make you feel small.
    were not scared of you,
    and no one will be again
    no one will see that smile.
    as long as were still here.






    Submitted on 2009-10-14 21:32:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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