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    dots Submission Name: Rain Dropsdots

    Author: Mithrandir
    ASL Info:    28/m/N.Y.
    Elite Ratio:    4.62 - 452/681/113
    Words: 57
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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       Please dont ask the reason behind this, take from it what you will.

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    dotsRain Dropsdots

    Clouds roll in
    Over sullen eyes
    Rain drops, drop, drop, drop
    On swollen cheeks

    She screams
    She screams
    A name

    Lightning strikes
    Another mark to be covered
    Lightning strikes
    Her down on her knees

    And the rain drops, drop, drop, drop
    From blood shot eyes
    The rain drops, drop, drop, drop

    Submitted on 2004-07-20 18:37:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      goosebumbs ensued...whoa..that was a dark place i just visited..the repetition almost had me wanting to mention it...but somehow...it seemed to stop just short of overdoing it...very good...
    | Posted on 2004-07-21 00:00:00 | by Kristina9178 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is well written. I have the images that you've conjured up with this poem. Very stromy - kind of stuff that transports you right to the scene that you've described.
    I enjoyed reading this...
    | Posted on 2004-07-20 00:00:00 | by Judy | [ Reply to This ]
      Your imagry was so vivid, I could see this peice in my mind.Thankyou for your hard word and effort.

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    | Posted on 2004-07-20 00:00:00 | by Siren Mengana | [ Reply to This ]
      I like how you kind of compared the storm to what she feels inside. Very good write. You gave great details and description of her and the storm. Kind of like an internal storm is how I see it. Great job!
    | Posted on 2004-07-20 00:00:00 | by borderlinetears | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmm... I think in this poem the raindrops are supposed to mean the trials that have been thrust upon this woman, and she's trying to get through it all.

    She screams
    She screams
    A name

    I think this means that she screams once, and is drowned out by thunder, screams again and manages to get out a name. This stanza in particular really stood out. The last line was kind of sudden, but very profound.
    | Posted on 2004-07-20 00:00:00 | by emo-tastic | [ Reply to This ]

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