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    Author: lechuga
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 1/0/7
    Words: 147
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 21
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    I’d sing this loud
    I’d sing my lungs out!
    All, for you to hear
    But you wouldn’t listen,
    And no one else will.

    You’ve been gone for hours
    Moving farther with every one
    Onward! To Max knows where, you flee
    But the farther you run,
    The colder I get
    And I can’t feel the welts
    Forming on my fingertips

    I’ll keep pulling these strings
    And wish that every one
    Pulled you closer to me.

    Continue to run
    Keep up your pace
    Our distance will grow
    My blood will be ice
    My skin, cold as snow
    My last breathe a whisper-
    Of frost in your ear
    My eyes wide and blank
    I’m frozen solid, in time
    My lips parted, opaque
    In anticipation of this,
    A song of dead silence
    (As if it caused strain)
    I’m blue in the face
    Though its sound never came




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