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    dots Submission Name: Volver/Limpiodots
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    Author: lechuga
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 1/0/7
    Words: 220
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
    Total Views: 27
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    dotsVolver/Limpiodots
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    {Part 1}

    All I hear is-
    Rushing
    Liquid, Heat
    Washing over me
    In ripples and cascades
    It leaves me in waves
    Of droplets that rain
    Onto this porcelain floor
    That I do stain.

    It's euphoriah, sometimes..
    I let go.
    It will most likely kill me
    Someday, I'll let go
    And forget my way back
    But not today
    Today, I returned
    Shaking and smiling and laughing
    (Must I be insane?)
    Sputter and choke, on salt mingled water
    (This has been done in my name.)
    Liberating tears-
    Chain me, they may
    In their secret way
    This is the start of my day.


    {Part 2}

    Indeed, it takes me
    But still, I say-
    This water is not hot enough
    T'is never hot enough, for me
    To erase the path I tread
    To make this conscience clean
    Right these wrongs in my head
    Innocence of a newborn babe-
    I cannot attain,
    (T'was not you who fed.)
    So, I won't deny this blame
    And say it was you who lead.

    I think..
    Water could never be hot enough
    It could boil off my skin
    Blisters, the bubbles-
    Flaming red of inflamed skin
    The angry sinews,
    They may be washed away
    But the water
    Will never, ever be hot enough
    To rinse what I've done down the drain




    Submitted on 2009-10-15 14:01:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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