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    dots Submission Name: Are they your friends?dots
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    Author: Katsi039tsahente
    Elite Ratio:    1.7 - 4/17/25
    Words: 71
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
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       I wrote this for my best friend because she was there for me when i needed her. So I want to be there for her.


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    dotsAre they your friends?dots
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    Fuck the people that say they care,
    Fuck the people who are never there.


    i hate when you tell someone
    whats really going on
    and they say that they care,
    but when you need them there never there.


    It's like a slap in the face
    because you trust them
    and they say oh well.


    Well fuck them all
    you have better friends who really care.




    Submitted on 2009-10-16 10:08:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      :) Definately relateable. I'm glad you have a good relationship with your friend. As for the piece I get the feeling you didn't spend much time on it, maybe give it some time and then come back and add on to it. The obvious rhymes kinda distract from the piece. Give it a more complex vocabulary. I don't mean to sound harsh or mean, please take my suggestions as constructive critisism. :)

    ~Carrie
    | Posted on 2009-10-18 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]


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