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    dots Submission Name: Love Commandmentsdots
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    Author: Cayman
    ASL Info:    31
    Elite Ratio:    2.77 - 182/168/72
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsLove Commandmentsdots
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    With all the technology that exists, funny how the heart still persists.
    What about the morning after? Being the recipient of your love?
    What about treating you with respect and you knowing that youíre all Iím thinking of.

    Love commands me to command my love because plentiful fruit awaits our debut.

    These are my commandments:
    Give your heart in totality and search within yourself to provide personal wealth.
    Devote your mind and spirit and one day we will inherit.
    Love is not given but earned, not hunted but sought.
    One must give them your all and all will be given to them.
    Pledges and commitments support the satisfaction.
    Keep it lively? I disagree because I want our love to grow with age.




    Submitted on 2009-10-16 14:34:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      How nice! The last line is beautiful and growing with age instead of keeping it lively is a wonderful concept!
    | Posted on 2009-10-17 00:00:00 | by Peacejoe | [ Reply to This ]


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