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    Author: Xiallia
    ASL Info:    17-F-Missing Osaka[IL]
    Elite Ratio:    1.49 - 3/23/32
    Words: 287
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    You who have issued forth your love,
    Look to the sky in this world of madness
    Now, your eyes should be here, eyes that never fade away
    But you don't know anything

    I wonder when it began?
    I wonder where we may go to visit with the end?

    We trace the black sky that was dirtied beneath our feet
    With the whiteness at our fingertips

    The stars that you sheltered invite you towards their repose, but
    You don't know anything about how
    The stars that tear and devour in this newly-birthed hatred
    Will become your poison, and scorch your body

    The sins of the morning spill over into the evening and dirty the night
    Where are you, whom we called the sky?

    That girl is the key to washing away the sin
    Walking together, you can discover the weight of that sin

    The girl who knows nothing of time became a curse herself
    An incredible power must be eating away at her heart at last

    Scorched by the hatred of the past, you released the fire
    Your own screams invited the sin, sneering
    You cannot return to where you were anymore

    Your heart begins to fade away under the influence of the serpent that wanders the sky;
    It collected your light and made it unclear
    The battle continues, dancing in and between the sky
    And the pain continues as well

    The endless sky...

    You melted me in the morning, we spoke in the evening, you loved me in the night
    You came close to me in the night, when we called you the sky
    And committed a great sin
    Your unrewarded existence will turn everything into nothing




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