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    dots Submission Name: "The Song Of Leaves"dots
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    Author: Ron Cole
    Elite Ratio:    3.95 - 2383/1715/240
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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       Another poem celebrating Autumn.


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    Hiss, kiss, twirl and twist,
    leaves falling from the tree!
    Summer's over and now at last
    they're loosened and they're free!

    They praise the wind and sky
    and pirouette quite free
    they're graceful in their maiden flight
    from their mother tree.

    Sailing gently on the breeze,
    swaying neath the sky.
    They flutter gently, gracefully down,
    landing with a sigh.

    They touch each other on the ground,
    or scatter with the breeze.
    They speak in hushed and rustling tones,
    gossiping about the trees.

    Part of Autumn's grandeur,
    played upon the breeze
    is the brilliance of Fall's colors
    and the whispered song of leaves.

    Ron Cole
    Autumn 2009




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      A fine description of what fall should look like. Here in the desert, we see dry leaves on the cottonwood ,mulberry, or china berry,that's about it for fall colors, it cools down to the low to mid thirtys at night and highs around seventy, to seventy five. Oh well, it could be worse, we could move to Flagstaff and get some real cold stuff. LOL
    | Posted on 2011-04-27 00:00:00 | by DUSTYTU | [ Reply to This ]
      I love your interpretation of Autumn!

    It's usually associated with loss and death, but you infuse it with joy.

    Your choice of words evokes a sense of playfulness, a celebration of beauty rather than the usual melancholy/nostalgia.



    Now I feel like jumping into a pile of freshly-raked leaves! Unfortunately, 1) autumn's over and 2) I'm living in a tropical country.

    Hah.
    | Posted on 2009-12-24 00:00:00 | by Maverique | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh, this IS certainly one of your very best! I loved this, you have captured, most brilliantly, the motion and action of falling leaves in autumn, and that, my friend, is no mean feat!!! I loved it!
    | Posted on 2009-10-29 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey i never got around to reply a message you sent to me but never mind ,i think you have what we African call the comand of language known only to elders.Keep the good work up
    | Posted on 2009-10-18 00:00:00 | by kingsley | [ Reply to This ]
      What a lovely ode to fall!
    The fallen leaves are as much a part of the beauty and charm of autumn; their rustle and crunch are the soundtrack of the season!
    Yet most often they are used as the symbols of death and loss. I love the way you've given the dead leaves joyful voices and gossipy natures!


    Just one nit to pick, though:

    Parts of Autumn's grandeur,
    played upon the breeze
    are the brilliance of Fall's colors
    and the whispered song of leaves.

    I really enjoyed this celebration of the season!
    It also reminded me of my soak in the tub last night...but, that's another story!

    Thanks for sharing your words here, Ron!
    | Posted on 2009-10-18 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]
      This really brings back memories to me of camping trips. I've always loved the way leaves change since I read a book about a leaf who didn't want to fall from its tree. Beautifully captures the essence of the falling leaves. Wow!
    | Posted on 2009-10-17 00:00:00 | by Peacejoe | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this a lot. Its a great contrast to what usually comes to mind with autumn. Instead of seasonal depression you are giving the leaves new life.
    | Posted on 2009-10-17 00:00:00 | by silentpoison | [ Reply to This ]


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