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    dots Submission Name: A letter to whom it no longer concernsdots
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    Author: silentpoison
    ASL Info:    22/F/Teh Shire
    Elite Ratio:    2.67 - 204/259/118
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
    Total Views: 565
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       Dear mother... Go to hell ... and i mean that in the nicest way possible


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    dotsA letter to whom it no longer concernsdots
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    To whom it may concern,
    IF it concerns you anymore. I've come to terms with closing this worn and battered door. I no longer wish to bicker, or be treated as one forlorne. So, with all due respect. I now take my leave. And venture on with the next step. I've found better prospects, and a better kind of war. It's easier to confuse an army, than a commander with a drawn sword. For every thrust I've parried, and cannon ball I've dodge. I've become so tired and weary. So now I take my leave and walk out your front door. Thank for all you've taught me, now i face the world.

    Sincerely,
    Your daughter




    Submitted on 2009-10-17 00:42:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow, very effective at making you see the anger. And the thank you at the end really sets a crazy conclusion.
    | Posted on 2009-10-17 00:00:00 | by Peacejoe | [ Reply to This ]


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