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    dots Submission Name: It hurt A Bitdots
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    Author: Demon__666
    ASL Info:    20/f/Oklahoma
    Elite Ratio:    2.45 - 312/359/124
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 524
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    Description:
       Old Poem about an old relationship.


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    dotsIt hurt A Bitdots
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    I have to admit,
    That you hurt me a bit.


    You just walked away,
    But never told me why.


    I hadnt cried in days,
    You managed to make me break.


    So i soaked my face,
    and streaked my makeup


    I Cut my losses,
    Even friends break up.


    The ardest thing i'll have to do,
    Is walk away from me and you.


    But in the end i guess its best,
    I'll leave you figure out the rest.




    Submitted on 2009-10-17 10:45:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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