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    dots Submission Name: Death Of A Lifedots
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    Author: Demon__666
    ASL Info:    20/f/Oklahoma
    Elite Ratio:    2.46 - 309/352/116
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 54
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    dotsDeath Of A Lifedots
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    I’m laying here on the ground,
    Watching my bones and tendons twitch around,
    Wondering what could be,
    If death had never caught me.

    A Tear runs down my cheek,
    Every time I hear you speak,
    I’m hurting all over again,
    And my heart is wearing thin.

    I gave it to you to hold,
    Instead you shoved it into a mold,
    A mold you know it will never fit.

    I’m breaking apart inside,
    Like I have been drinking cyanide,
    Everything just melts,
    Can you imagine how I’ve felt?

    So I lay here on the ground,
    Blood spilling all around,
    My heart you viciously split,
    My wrists I sorrowfully SLIT.
    Wanting to bleed to death,
    Hoping you watch me take my last breath.
    Stare at my GREUSOME scene,
    Gasp in disbelief.

    Fall to the floor and hold me,
    I’ve never felt so close,
    Tears fall from your eyes,
    As you mourn the death of a life.




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