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    dots Submission Name: Sick To Deathdots
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    Author: Runes
    Elite Ratio:    5.8 - 268/229/100
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 41
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    dotsSick To Deathdots
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    It's Saturday night, with same dreary theme;
    I'm coughing up brown and orange and green.
    My forehead is summer, my lungs Halloween,
    and everything hurts in between.

    Maybe if I just lie down on the floor...
    Maybe if I lean back against the door...
    Maybe if I have a hot cup of tea...
    Maybe I won't die quite as miserably.

    Come Sunday morning, they'll find me propped
    against some door frame near the cold meds I dropped.
    They'll see empty bottles and claim I OD'd,
    but it's really the flu that killed me.





    Submitted on 2009-10-17 20:57:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      oh dear we're getting gloomier. i think you need some twinkle music. haha.

    the first verse especially has a little twinkle in its eye that captured my attention.

    | Posted on 2009-10-17 00:00:00 | by Theophilus | [ Reply to This ]


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