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    dots Submission Name: Not Lovedots
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    Author: Peacejoe
    Elite Ratio:    2.89 - 30/29/23
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       This is the most hard to explain thing in the world. If you understand. Don't call me weird. Please...


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    dotsNot Lovedots
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    This love is of hope for the coming day
    When we will meet and share our lives,
    Your soul is mine,
    My soul is yours,
    We live as one,
    Love will thrive.
    For you are made of my own mind,
    And I have made you what you are,
    But soon another I must find,
    For you are not a flesh of mine.
    My mind created you so I may,
    Have found reason to keep my life.
    And thus the sorrow that I feel,
    Is for you who are lost,
    In Loves dark blight.
    Though I will love you till the day,
    My death is come,
    And I will stay,
    In hell, or above where the angels sing,
    Your sin is due cause me grief.
    But though the sky will call my sins,
    I love you till the very end.




    Submitted on 2009-10-17 22:14:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Good work. (thank you by the way for checking your work and correcting any mistakes, I get so frusterated with everyone who doesn't) Over all, the subject was well presented but there wasn't as much support as I'd like to see.

    ~Carrie
    | Posted on 2009-10-18 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]
      We all have a fantacy of a perfect love, and, when completely alone and abandoned, of any love at all.

    Nice work!
    | Posted on 2009-10-17 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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