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    dots Submission Name: Mirrordots
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    Author: Hazy skies
    ASL Info:    18/M/Texas
    Elite Ratio:    2.34 - 20/51/26
    Words: 70
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
    Total Views: 1135
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 602



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    dotsMirrordots
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    I see the man walk
    Down my street.
    His eyes,
    Cold.
    His face,
    Worn.
    His heart,
    Broken.

    He does not speak,
    Only motions me.
    His hand,
    Steady.
    His head,
    Lowered.
    His heart,
    Broken.

    I approach this man
    With utmost caution.
    His body,
    Weak.
    His lips,
    Trembling.
    His heart,
    Broken.

    But I soon see
    With growing fear
    He is,
    Me.
    He is,
    You.
    Our hearts,
    Broken...




    Submitted on 2009-10-17 23:53:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Wow, very well written and clever :) the tittle finally made sense in the end. awesomeness!!!
    | Posted on 2010-08-04 00:00:00 | by cherrywillow | [ Reply to This ]
      Very interesting write, I liked this. It's simple but says a lot.
    | Posted on 2010-01-22 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]
      hey i especially like the format. each stanza started with two solid lines followed by 6 staggering. Its simple and very effective. the last stanza gives it a nice punch, concreting that realization of your reflection. definetly didnt hate it.
    | Posted on 2009-12-08 00:00:00 | by SincerWritinAsh | [ Reply to This ]
      I really enjoyed this poem. It's different. it affected me in a way i find both unfamiliar refferring to itss structure and familiar in its feeling. I can't give any correction due to my lack of knowlege toward this particular type of poetry but i had to point out just how it moved me.
    | Posted on 2009-10-19 00:00:00 | by InsanityVanity | [ Reply to This ]
      dude thats pretty good the last few lines, an sense of relate to ones emotions
    | Posted on 2009-10-18 00:00:00 | by ty | [ Reply to This ]


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