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Burn


Author: MysterydarkPoet
ASL Info:    20/f/Aust
Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 157 /295 /173
Words: 104
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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Burn


sun burn my youthful skin and hollow it out
i want to feel this pain and shed my doubt
free me from this limbo of a dreamless daze
let these clouds drift down
upon my closed eyes,
i want to wake, and feel the burn
wake and feel everything but alone
shattering me from this frozen world-

endless time tick, tick on and on.
countless years go, go on and on.

deserted i will still stand,
with a wind that only chills me-
faithless but not hopeless
& left with too much love to give
for a heart that's unopen and unwilling




Submitted on 2009-10-18 05:18:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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