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    dots Submission Name: and life goes ondots
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    Author: InsanityVanity
    ASL Info:    16/male/noneyah
    Elite Ratio:    2.64 - 7/9/18
    Words: 199
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 28
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    Description:
       my problems are mine alone who am i to ruin or intrude on the merrimaking of those who deserve it.


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    dotsand life goes ondots
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    Am I crazy to be annoyed by my own insanity?
    I generally find myself expressing it with vanity.
    My mind is like something not to be let out of a cage.
    Since I’m bipolar I have shifted to only thoughts of rage.

    I am split in two, as I switch from day to day.
    During these switches I forget to watch what I say.
    Shall I show my face so dismal and upset?
    I hold it in and smile as I remember my regret.

    I do it not for me but for the people close.
    If their joy is so solemn, who am I to impose?
    I indulge in their success and smile back when the smile.
    I am trying to mend my heart all the while.

    I try not to ruin the extravagance of their celebration.
    I constantly fear they’ll notice my hesitation.
    It is a sure sign of my lament.
    I must consort myself to their merriment.

    Some would consider this a selfless act.
    It is nothing more than an attempt to sever contact.
    You think me holy enough to ring the church bell.
    My true destiny is to fall into hell.




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      wow! very nice... interesting tooo... it made me sit up and read. the rhyming is very good and so is the matter of fact kind of description... i liked it a lot, but the concept almost evokes pity
    | Posted on 2009-10-20 00:00:00 | by rsujith | [ Reply to This ]


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