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    dots Submission Name: to fill a voiddots
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    Author: wovenwords
    ASL Info:    18/F/Washington
    Elite Ratio:    2.55 - 108/285/166
    Words: 262
    Class/Type: Poetry/Religious
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    It was 1996
    and God watched from the trees
    grown over with the moss
    that crept like a slow plague.
    The jacket of pink neon hugged my shoulders
    in the autumn
    as I pounced from tree to tree
    in search of fabled Dutch gnomes,
    living inside the uprooted extremities
    of the age-old mammoths that towered above.
    And had I known,
    had I the might of brain power it required
    my search may have been short-lived
    and less disappointing
    than the day I discovered,
    oh, woe is me,
    those hideous gnomes
    were words from my father’s mouth
    and nothing more.
    Not tangible.
    Not probable.
    Not even anatomically correct, necessarily,
    and their homes were definitely not
    in the gnarled vacancies of the trees.

    It is 2009
    and there is a void
    that echoes noiselessly through the forest,
    emanating from the laborious creak of the hunchbacked tree.
    My hand clutches the lens of the camera hanging from my neck
    and occasionally
    I halt my stroll
    to capture a photo of the holes.
    Today I laugh at the prospect of gnomes
    and all other things invisible to the eye, for that matter
    but I believe
    in cameras and leaves and squirrels and trees
    and I believe
    in voids and holes and gaps
    and all those surrounded bits of emptiness
    and when I tire from my long walk across narrow paths
    I settle into a hole like a cradle
    and close my eyes for a brief slumber.




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