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    dots Submission Name: Caringdots
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    Author: dthforeverpain8
    ASL Info:    17/Female/TMON
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 112/217/289
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsCaringdots
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    Why do you care so much?
    Iím not a good person
    Iíve done so much wrong
    You canít honestly care this much,
    Can you?

    How do you care so much?
    I couldnít handle it, myself
    It takes way too much to deal with my own problems
    You donít honestly care this much,
    Do you?

    What makes you care so much?
    I would never want to do what you are doing
    Thereís no way you can keep this up
    You wont honestly care this much,
    Will you?





    Submitted on 2009-10-19 07:27:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Nice, short and simple. I like the cynical undertone (particularly in the last stanza), the repetition of the word 'honestly' emphasises this. Using questions to open and close each stanza leaves every statement unanswered, which lets the reader play around with what they think the piece means. It's a pleasant change from all the pieces that have a strict plot that the reader HAS to follow.

    Good job
    | Posted on 2009-10-21 00:00:00 | by Iffy | [ Reply to This ]


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