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    dots Submission Name: Alone in Companydots
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    Author: WhiteTiger
    ASL Info:    18
    Elite Ratio:    2.88 - 17/16/11
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 677
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 716



    Description:
       I admit, this is a bit of an odd one but I think I got the idea across


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    dotsAlone in Companydots
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    Surrounded by a crowd
    countless bodies, countless faces
    some of the familiar
    most however not
    so many people, paying eachother no mind
    pushing and shoving
    like livestock
    Too caught up in personal matters to care about those around
    We have become withdrawn
    I have become withdrawn
    A few passing by notice me
    I know them
    A quick, unasuring hug here
    An empty smile there
    then, as quickly as they appeared thry are gone, swallowed by the crowd
    Hollow goodbyes remain
    Countless bodies, blurry faces
    pushing, shoving
    surrounded
    With drawn

    In the company of men we are alone




    Submitted on 2009-10-19 11:55:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      We feel, at times, most alone when surrounded by people. It is because we are not touched, not embraced, and scarcely noticed by throngs of people concerned only with themselves!

    This is very profound, and a good treatise on loneliness and aloneness.
    | Posted on 2009-11-13 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      Interesting. This has a good message behind it. Could use a little refining, but all in all it is very well done. I like it .
    | Posted on 2009-10-28 00:00:00 | by LiChan | [ Reply to This ]


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