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    dots Submission Name: The Bubble Fortressdots
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    Author: rsujith
    Elite Ratio:    2.28 - 49/18/6
    Words: 175
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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    dotsThe Bubble Fortressdots
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    Each, a mundane sphere of film; each;
    Each, closed unto itself; each;
    Each, unique in its own way; each;
    Each, ends where it begins; each;
    Each, unbelievably fragile; each;



    And there are millions; and;
    Brushing past one another; brushing;
    Sitting on one another; sitting;
    A complex of complexes; a complex;
    Of glittering brilliance and; of;
    Of awe inspiring beauty; of;
    A seemly bubble fortress; a seemly
    of impenetrable strength; of.




    Yet, there in the middle; yet,
    In this one bubble; in,
    Was brewing deep trouble; was.
    When this one, just one, burst; when,
    like a match on a haystack; like,
    a chain followed; a chain,
    and in one innocuous moment; and,
    there was nothing left; there,
    but a few drops scattered around; but.




    This is the world I see; this-
    of overlapping bubbles; of,
    held in a single fortress; held,
    just like this poem you read; just-
    as I walk down the road; as,
    in a mundane bubble of my own; in!!!




    Submitted on 2009-10-20 08:49:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      effin crazy.
    i wish the last line didn't have the word mundane in it.
    in a bubble of my own; in

    that's all. i just want to read this a whole bunch of times in a row 'til my bubble esplodes.
    | Posted on 2009-10-20 00:00:00 | by DestroyOhBoy | [ Reply to This ]


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