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    dots Submission Name: tomorrowdots
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    Author: Maverique
    ASL Info:    25/F/Own little world
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 438/478/128
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotstomorrowdots
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    tomorrow, they say.

    tomorrow will be different. better.

    but what do they know?
    nothing of acute coronary syndrome, certainly.
    and even less about the certainty of death at 1 a.m.

    or of the many different ways a heart can be bruised beyond healing
    and salvation

    the meaning of carelessness
    and selfishness;
    of pain and fear and loss

    or the ruling rage that silences reason

    tomorrow.
    yes, tomorrow.

    what of it?




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      Today is but the tomorrow that was the care of yesterday ( a line in my poem "Time Marches On").

    Tomorrow; the place where anticipation begins and reality is held in abeyance!

    You have created a very thought provoking bit of verse here, lovely lady!
    | Posted on 2009-12-24 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      This fits a little too sadly with my mood today. Hope dies, right? And what then?

    I hope this feeling doesn't stay with you too long. Onwards and upwards. Yes.

    What of it?

    (what a perfect ending).

    This is well written, the rhyme is good, not dum-de-dum-de-dum, it's natural and it fits.

    We can only think of tomorrow sometimes, and maybe tomorrow will be better. Who knows?

    (this is a crappy comment, I'm sorry. This has made me feel a dull ache in my stomach and a sinking-mind and thick water so my thoughts have gone a little awol).

    Aly
    | Posted on 2009-11-04 00:00:00 | by AlyRose | [ Reply to This ]
      
    You've grown in your writing with this piece, piglet.
    Here, a response, because, why not, right?
    Nods.


    Tomorrow they'll say

    a day of apples and Bella—
    here, on this balcony
    facing the sun.

    Late spring

    and mandarins
    in my pantry; the orange glisten
    of summer nearing, nascent

    in bas-relief

    of curled clouds fresco-white, bleached stone
    hanging over as a new moon
    blooms

    Release.
    | Posted on 2009-10-30 00:00:00 | by trinityfinger | [ Reply to This ]


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