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    dots Submission Name: who are you?dots
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    Author: Katsi039tsahente
    Elite Ratio:    1.7 - 4/17/25
    Words: 280
    Class/Type: Poetry/Me
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    Who are you is what I say
    As I look in this mirror
    I see someone who looks like me, but isn't me
    She talks like me,
    She smells like me,
    She has my friends,
    She has my name,
    She has my school,
    She does my work,
    She takes my money,
    She live's in my house.

    What does she want?
    The only place were I can be myself,
    Is in my journal.

    I ask her why does she do this to me.
    She never answers.
    So why does she do drugs?
    Why does she cut herself?
    Why does she hate everyone?

    When I ask who you are.
    You never answer.
    So I look in this mirror .
    Till you'll look away,
    But I know that you wont.
    Maybe if I try a piece of me will come out,
    And a piece of you will leave.

    Then I think that without you I will die.
    Because I need you to live.
    Your the bigest part of my life.
    Without you i'm notthing.
    I wont let that happen to me or to her.
    No one can take her away from me.

    So as I look in this mirror I say.
    You are me and I am you.
    Without you I would kill myself.
    Without you i'm notthing.
    I would be no one If you left me.
    So now I ask if you will stay with me?
    Will you stay with me for a life time?
    To take this road that I have to take.
    So till we meet again.
    You'll have to answer.
    Yes.
    Or.
    No.











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    "I look in this mirror/ Till' you look away/ But I know that you won't"

    It's kinda like a play on the possible self, and how it always contradicts who you are. ...phillisophical.

    "a peice of you will leave"

    i think thats amazing.

    the whole thing. Favouriting poem.
    | Posted on 2009-10-24 00:00:00 | by MidnightSun89 | [ Reply to This ]


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