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Submission Name:
In Love with the Darkness pt. 2
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Author:
Xiallia
ASL Info:
17-F-Missing Osaka[IL]
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1.49 - 3/23/32
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112
Class/Type:
Poetry/Dark
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I never realized I was going to do a part 2...*shrugs*
In Love with the Darkness pt. 2
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I leave my Father, ready to face the Darkness alone....
The shadows seemingly welcome me with open arms.
Soon i'm being choked.
Suffocating
Daddy...Where's my Daddy?
He's no-where near...
I wanted him to save me...
I'm not ready to face this alone, not yet.
Cold Icy Tears fall down my cheeks.
Slowly loosing my sight I look around...
I see my Father there just staring at me as I suffer.
My arm tries to reach out towards him.
He just shook his head soon fading into the darkness.
What should I do...what should I do....?
what should I do.....
Submitted on 2009-10-20 18:02:19
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