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    dots Submission Name: In Love with the Darkness pt. 2dots
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    Author: Xiallia
    ASL Info:    17-F-Missing Osaka[IL]
    Elite Ratio:    1.49 - 3/23/32
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    I never realized I was going to do a part 2...*shrugs*


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    dotsIn Love with the Darkness pt. 2dots
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    I leave my Father, ready to face the Darkness alone....


    The shadows seemingly welcome me with open arms.
    Soon i'm being choked.
    Suffocating

    Daddy...Where's my Daddy?

    He's no-where near...
    I wanted him to save me...
    I'm not ready to face this alone, not yet.

    Cold Icy Tears fall down my cheeks.
    Slowly loosing my sight I look around...

    I see my Father there just staring at me as I suffer.
    My arm tries to reach out towards him.
    He just shook his head soon fading into the darkness.


    What should I do...what should I do....?

    what should I do.....





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