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    dots Submission Name: at-mos-phericdots
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    Author: caster
    ASL Info:    31.M.MO
    Elite Ratio:    3.34 - 136/280/161
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
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       about: just don't feel like saying these days.

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    dotsat-mos-phericdots
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    locked in here for days and nites
    spying on the moon
    we have lost all communication
    drawn into these speakers for distraction
    can't quite remember how i got here

    saw a ghost by my bed
    reflections are all i have left
    maybe a little too accepting

    left myself in the car all day and nite
    dying on the inside
    no more recorded conversations
    digging into these books for medication
    paid a price to forget but i still remember

    saw a ghost by my bed
    reflections are all i have left
    maybe a little too accepting

    i speak to the wind/
    and trust someone is listening
    if i fold my hands
    and bow my head
    will you be impressed/
    i know you better than this




    Submitted on 2009-10-20 19:07:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      that made me cry. it's perfect. i love you for this.
    | Posted on 2009-10-26 00:00:00 | by Razor2TheRosary | [ Reply to This ]


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