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    dots Submission Name: Crossing Trenchesdots
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    Author: SonOfDamascus
    ASL Info:    18/m/Maine
    Elite Ratio:    2.45 - 27/35/37
    Words: 337
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 502
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2158



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       a new rap.


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    dotsCrossing Trenchesdots
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    Iíd stay away if I were you.
    Youíll never know just what Iíll do.
    Im back from the basics,
    Ready to blast it past the bases
    Iíll never stop,
    Until you bleed that last drop.
    I ainít sayin goodbye,

    Im tired of crossin trenches,
    Just to sit on benches.
    Hurry up and wait,
    Cause im always on time
    Never half past late
    Locked and primed
    No more contracts signed.
    Im here to stay,
    But not for you,
    Theres not much left and it ainít for you
    You must think me such a fool
    To just sit here and leakin drool
    Whenever you walk by,
    Your superman ainít gonna fly
    Eríry time you want him to drop by.
    So again I ainít sayin goodbye

    Im tired of crossin trenches,
    Just to sit on benches.
    Hurry up and wait,
    Cause im always on time
    Never half past late
    Locked and primed
    No more contracts signed.

    Face to face with what is left
    Clear the room
    Take two shots center mass
    Donít mean to be rude
    Donít mean to be crass,
    But im tired of you shakin your ass
    To every guy
    That waves his hand, or winks an eye
    Freedom ainít that great on me
    But you ainít fixin that anytime B
    I ainít feelin you you ainít feelin me
    Been gone long enough to see,
    Just who you are when mr. kent ainít around
    Donít call for the arms,
    That kept you safe and sound.
    Im cutting all ties,
    Time to stop our lies,
    So wipe the tears girl,
    Take a left turn.
    And Iíll take the right.
    Just like Iím supposed to.
    Leave you to do,
    Exactly whatever it is you do.
    You gotta understand that even with tears in your eyes.
    We ainít sharing goodbyes.

    ĎCause Iím tired of crossin trenches,
    Just to sit on benches.
    Hurry up and wait,
    Cause im always on time
    Never half past late
    Locked and primed
    No more contracts signed.

    Leavin You Behind.




    Submitted on 2009-10-20 20:00:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Omg. I loved the ending. I liked it's simply rythme. It was very interesting. The ending was kick-ass. I mean seriously. That was good. I loved the part about
    "Donít call for the arms,
    That kept you safe and sound.
    Im cutting all ties,
    Time to stop our lies,
    So wipe the tears girl,
    Take a left turn.
    And Iíll take the right."

    That was classic Poe right there. Incredibly well-written. and you can quote me on saying that.
    -Rachel:)
    | Posted on 2009-12-14 00:00:00 | by PopRocksRae | [ Reply to This ]


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