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    dots Submission Name: Waiting for a Replydots

    Author: Jessica Lynn
    ASL Info:    22/f/mn
    Elite Ratio:    2.86 - 121/119/57
    Words: 164
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       its kind of self explanatory. . . .

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    dotsWaiting for a Replydots

    Itís like a dťjŗ vu,
    Or a karmic experience.
    Itís hard to sit and watch,
    When I know how to handle this.

    My compassionate nature,
    And my too-strong love,
    Make me feel like a failure,
    Of this Iíve had enough.

    You canít help those,
    Who wonít help themselves.
    Itís a tough lesson learned,
    When someone close goes through hell.

    Well maybe not so close,
    But God I wish he was.
    That monkey on his back,
    Ruins it for the both of us.

    I donít want to be his world.
    In any way, shape or form.
    But I do want his world,
    To be good enough for him.

    I suppose itís not my business,
    That I should walk away.
    But I feel that heís worth knowing,
    So Iíll wait for another day.

    And though I speak from afar,
    I wish him all the best.
    I pray that heíll find happiness,
    And from his demon,
    Get some rest.

    Submitted on 2009-10-20 21:37:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is well done Jessica, and it tells a story that many should read. You have written with elegant structure, a continuous and lucid story line, and you show much talent!

    Good work!
    | Posted on 2009-10-21 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      loving someone who loves something you don't often leads to your tears and wasted time. However, fighting for them makes it all worth it.
    | Posted on 2009-10-21 00:00:00 | by PopRocksRae | [ Reply to This ]

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