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Author: Jessica Lynn
ASL Info:    22/f/mn
Elite Ratio:    2.86 - 121 /119 /57
Words: 164
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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its kind of self explanatory. . . .

Waiting for a Reply

It’s like a déjà vu,
Or a karmic experience.
It’s hard to sit and watch,
When I know how to handle this.

My compassionate nature,
And my too-strong love,
Make me feel like a failure,
Of this I’ve had enough.

You can’t help those,
Who won’t help themselves.
It’s a tough lesson learned,
When someone close goes through hell.

Well maybe not so close,
But God I wish he was.
That monkey on his back,
Ruins it for the both of us.

I don’t want to be his world.
In any way, shape or form.
But I do want his world,
To be good enough for him.

I suppose it’s not my business,
That I should walk away.
But I feel that he’s worth knowing,
So I’ll wait for another day.

And though I speak from afar,
I wish him all the best.
I pray that he’ll find happiness,
And from his demon,
Get some rest.

Submitted on 2009-10-20 21:37:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is well done Jessica, and it tells a story that many should read. You have written with elegant structure, a continuous and lucid story line, and you show much talent!

Good work!
| Posted on 2009-10-21 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
  loving someone who loves something you don't often leads to your tears and wasted time. However, fighting for them makes it all worth it.
| Posted on 2009-10-21 00:00:00 | by PopRocksRae | [ Reply to This ]

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