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    dots Submission Name: Kalona's Embracedots

    Author: girly101
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    dotsKalona's Embracedots

    When it all grows cold,
    and the ground falls away.
    Just let yourself fall,
    It'll be okay.

    When the darkness sings,
    as you fall through its hands.
    Don't scream in sight of his glorious wings,
    They'll catch you before you land.

    When the world is so dark,
    and you can not see.
    Don't cry for help,
    If they come they'll never let you be.

    When Kalona's deep laugh penetrates the silence,
    and you feel his soft black wings encase you.
    Don't gasp in fear or pleasure,
    Stay quiet no matter what you do.

    And as you wake from this dream,
    remember that he's coming for you.

    Submitted on 2009-10-21 04:42:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow this is so close to the piece I just posted. It has a very similar feel. Needless to say I like it alot. Perhaps we can combine our two pieces? Check out "Jesus Diary"

    your friend
    | Posted on 2009-10-21 00:00:00 | by BenCollier | [ Reply to This ]

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