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    dots Submission Name: Uncomfortabledots
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    Author: dthforeverpain8
    ASL Info:    15/Female/tmon
    Elite Ratio:    3.36 - 92/158/234
    Words: 184
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 17
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1275



    Description:
       Well, when you put it that way....

    I just compared a break up to an uncomfortable couch/


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    dotsUncomfortabledots
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    You were always there
    And I was so comfortable at first
    Until we started to rug each other wrong
    And I needed to move on

    Have you ever sat down, exhausted?
    Anything can be comfortable at first
    Until you’ve rested, and you feel better
    And you can’t stand
    The position you were in
    For one more second
    You just want
    Out.

    Do you know the feeling?
    The longer you stay there
    The more it hurts
    Your body bent
    In unfamiliar ways

    The pain is unbearable
    And you wish that you didn’t have to get up
    And move around
    Or change positions
    If only you could stay,
    Maybe you would eventually
    Learn to feel comfortable again?
    But not soon enough

    You stand up
    Take back what’s yours
    The experience
    It’s terrifying
    A free fall
    Through the night
    Destination: unknown

    You look back
    And know
    That despite the cold pain
    The emptiness
    There’s no safe way
    You could ever go back
    To the way it was before
    Without giving up
    Every ounce of yourself
    That you have left




    Submitted on 2009-10-21 07:11:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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