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    dots Submission Name: Sky Bluedots
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    Author: PopRocksRae
    ASL Info:    16 going on 17
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 174/201/192
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 19
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 679



    Description:
       his eyes are really deep. like oceans and so light they match the sky. It is so breath-taken.


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    dotsSky Bluedots
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    have you ever noticed?
    your eyes are so bright.
    they shine within my dark thoughts.
    they shine without light.

    so soft, so pretty.
    so deep. so blue.
    I fall without warning
    everytime I look at you.

    I draw them in my sleep
    I noticed them even when i don't try.
    God somehow took the skies
    and put them in your eyes.

    I keep looking in them.
    they always drag me in.
    I wonder if they sparkle
    when I can't see them.

    sometimes I catch myself
    before I go tell you.
    your eyes are so prefect.
    this prefect sky blue.




    Submitted on 2009-10-21 09:31:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      that was great, you have a fantastic talent, your words flow like a stream, brilliant, I love the line "God somehow took the sky and put them in your eyes" wish i thought of that,
    I will be reading more.......
    thanks for the great read, Diablo
    | Posted on 2009-10-23 00:00:00 | by Diablo Tapitio | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. This poem is so full of life, yet dim, I love it. I can relate to it since I am in love with a guy with sky blue colored eyes. I honestly admire this work. Keep it up! You have talent.
    | Posted on 2009-10-21 00:00:00 | by TJGirl | [ Reply to This ]


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