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    dots Submission Name: Glass Facadedots
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    Author: Vermalin
    Elite Ratio:    4.25 - 15/29/21
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Venting
    Total Views: 742
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 740



    Description:
       Out of nowhere, I just started to write. And this is what came out of my mind. So, yeah, here you go.


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    dotsGlass Facadedots
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    Yesterday's goals, dim memories.
    Dark saddened eyes, blurring with tears.
    Painful scars borne; Love's history.
    Futures crumble when doubt appears.

    No brightly lit hope envisioned,
    When following after harsh words.
    Hurt soul splits in twain, partitioned.
    Swooned by appeal - when numbness lured.

    Apologies made; never bought.
    Price paid turned out far too costly.
    Though never known what would be wrought -
    Must walk into the night softly.

    One wish, only to be released.
    Granted - now receive this token.
    Words written in rhyme, love's deceased.
    When promises made...

    Were broken.




    Submitted on 2009-10-21 12:04:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Verra well put together peice... I indeed enjoyed reading thing... such imagery and imagination. Writing what comes to mind to me is always best. My favorite lines...
    *Apologies made; never bought.
    Price paid turned out far too costly.
    ...This is absoutely inspirational to me. Again nicely done. Kudos!
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    | Posted on 2009-12-19 00:00:00 | by DearlyDeparted | [ Reply to This ]
      *Applauds.*Bravo, I must say you new profile picture goes very well with this piece of poetry and it is a great visual for it. also on a side note this poem was very nice indeed. I loved the use of language and the way you wrote it the only thing I might change in the whole thing is at the end with the three dot's, I'd have put a comma, but if you know my writing style at all you'd know I favor comma's over anything else
    | Posted on 2009-10-28 00:00:00 | by Scaredheart | [ Reply to This ]


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