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    dots Submission Name: moved on.dots
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    Author: PopRocksRae
    ASL Info:    16 going on 17
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 174/201/192
    Words: 83
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 23
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 526



    Description:
       cry when there's nothing left to lose.


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    dotsmoved on.dots
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    I get it.
    you're gone.
    I hurt you
    so you moved on.

    is she prettier?
    smarter than me?
    is she the girl
    you wanted me to be?

    I get it.
    I messed with your heart
    so you waited until I cried
    to tear me apart.

    is she better?
    deos she love you like i do?
    she is better then me
    cus she has you.

    I get it.
    I was wrong.
    but when I turned around
    you alreadly moved on.




    Submitted on 2009-10-21 12:21:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this. It completely made sense, and one didn't have to guess at its meaning. Great work.
    | Posted on 2009-10-21 00:00:00 | by KindredSpirit | [ Reply to This ]


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