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Pain -------------------------------------------
Have it your way
Have it mine
We need silence in this place
The night is where i hide
Deep inside
Deep inside i pain away time
In your heart i hope is mine
Help me deal with what i feel
Pain and hurt are all too real
Under the covers we laugh and shiver
Poison flows through me like an ancient river
This is the time, time to decide
Please don't leave, don't run and hide
PAIN IS SOMETHING I LIVE WITH, what else can you do but take it by the horns and make it a victory anyway you can. Seldom do people relate thinking it is a superfical bleeding heart and not realisticly believable material. Now your poem here is to me a bit choppy and the flow is a bit interupted by the short and lengthyness of the varied line structure. Still new is not all bad, just different, and that is good.
Submission Name: Pain
