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    dots Submission Name: Lesson's Learneddots
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    Author: heartless_
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    dotsLesson's Learneddots
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    I thought I knew love,
    Was sure of my plans, heartbreak
    Made me stumble, leaving me numb.

    From a pain so hard to bear
    Tears I was unwilling to cry.
    My faith was shattered,
    Torn apart by a heartless monster.

    Broken I stood unknowing,
    How to fix myself, how to go on.
    When all I wanted was to die.

    You said you loved me, wanted me.
    So why did you lie?
    If feelings never existed
    Why did you try?

    If it was all in my head,
    Why did you keep coming back?
    If Iím the one to blame,
    Then why am I the one
    Broken and ashamed?

    If you never cared at all
    Why did you ever say hello?
    If I was just your toy,
    Then why would you care for me?

    Some lessons are hard to learn,
    Painful and at times impossible
    When you believe itís all you wanted.

    Little did I know life, knew what he was.
    Could see me fall before I stumbled.
    Itís just another lesson learned,
    One of many in my book, not the first
    But surly not my last.




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