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    dots Submission Name: Alone in the Nightdots
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    Author: heartless_
    Elite Ratio:    2.43 - 282/242/141
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 47
    Average Vote:    4.7500
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    dotsAlone in the Nightdots
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    Awaken in the night,
    By a scream so frightful.
    A dream so horrifying
    Chills run down her spine.

    So alone she feels in a world
    Darker than the midnight hour.
    Where all her fears come to light,
    A world so far yet so close.

    Trapped by her own thoughts,
    An imagination so over worked,
    Reaching out to the empty bed

    Memories inside her head,
    Of the love she once had.
    That fate cruelly ripped away,
    Taken before his time was up.

    Leaving her whole world shattered,
    Everything breaking, with no cure
    For the night falls upon her once more,
    With no protection from her love.
    No arms to hold her through her fright.




    Submitted on 2009-10-21 14:32:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Oh gosh, this was great. The imagery it conveyed was perfect. It was so deep, and emotional, it made me sad as I read it. I want to take this person and comfort them!
    | Posted on 2009-10-23 00:00:00 | by Kaygrl | [ Reply to This ]
      This was great... I liked the "abrupt" ending. I do think that you should have added a little more to it but other than that i think you did a great job. Keep up the great work.
    | Posted on 2009-10-22 00:00:00 | by extrEMO | [ Reply to This ]


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