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    dots Submission Name: Good Daydots
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    Author: KindredSpirit
    ASL Info:    20, Male, Burlington Iowa
    Elite Ratio:    2.37 - 46/71/89
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
    Total Views: 31
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    dotsGood Daydots
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    This mirror reflects my image.
    I turn left and it obeys.
    This mirror reflects what is true.
    My actions are its to portray.

    I toy with my reflection,
    Daddling in the open.
    I make a few faces,
    Moving forward so the image will sharpen.

    I laugh and dance.
    Spinning round.
    My mind begins to swirl,
    And I fall to the ground.

    Regaining my feet
    I move closer to peer.
    The mirror fogs up
    And I draw a smiley face here.

    I laugh again
    Turning away.
    I guess my meaning is,
    Everyday is a good day.




    Submitted on 2009-10-21 22:05:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The rhythm and unforced rhymes of this make it so soothing. I found myself smiling as I read.
    My only quibble in the peer and here rhyme. But it's not that big of an issue.
    Very good job!
    | Posted on 2009-10-25 00:00:00 | by fictionalfiend | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this. The whole piece had a fine rhythm to it, and the rhymes didn't seem forced at all for the most part. Mirrors are truly fascinating objects. It's strange how we read so much about heartbreak but nothing about the wonderful creations that are mirrors.
    Everyday is truly a good day Thanks for writing this. It's a pleasure to read something on the lighter side once in a while.

    Abbas
    | Posted on 2009-10-22 00:00:00 | by abuzzbuzz92 | [ Reply to This ]


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