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    dots Submission Name: The Ruledots
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    Author: Horatio
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 8/2/1
    Words: 34
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       A little ditty.


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    dotsThe Ruledots
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    There is a line
    that is drawn
    There is a standard
    that will be followed
    This is the law
    This is your life
    Obey.
    Obey.
    The same thing
    Every day
    Obey.
    Obey.
    Obey.




    Submitted on 2009-10-22 00:43:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Speaking as someone who sure as hell doesn't want to, and has no place in society right now due to the fed-uppedness of ass-kissing and rigorous scheduling, I know exactly where you're coming from. I like "ditty sense", if this is indeed a "ditty." And I think I'd rather freeze and starve than do any of it ever again.
    | Posted on 2009-10-22 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]
      hmm...i've read this multipliable times over trying to find the right way to approach it...and it's not getting any easier because i'm very conflicted.

    this is a simply ditty but completely complexed at the same time...yes we have laws and a certain order to things but i've always believed that rules were made to be broken. it's the only way we've survived...

    do you think the first man/woman to strike fire was following along like everyone else...heck NO
    yet we all have restrictions on us that we can do absolutely nothing about and there is the clincher...
    obey
    obey
    obey


    yes this is perfect for it's simplicity and deep thought provoking symbolism at the same time!!!

    yea

    Thanks for Sharing
    | Posted on 2009-10-22 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]


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