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    dots Submission Name: Dreary Hazedots
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    Author: dthforeverpain8
    ASL Info:    15/Female/tmon
    Elite Ratio:    3.36 - 92/158/234
    Words: 196
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 17
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    dotsDreary Hazedots
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    The world around me is blurry
    Everything makes me laugh
    All I want is another cigarette
    People warn me it better be my last

    Don’t ruin my high
    I’m just here to have fun
    One more sip of alcohol
    And it’s obvious I’m done

    And we lay in the same field
    As so many times before
    But this time everything
    Seems like so much more

    The moon is so bright
    All I can do is stare
    Chilled to the bone
    With grass in my hair

    Pounding out drum solos
    Crazed music pounds in my head
    Pulling me out of this avalanche
    And pushing me ahead

    My ghosts appear
    Skeletons from my dark past
    Bring back down to earth
    False pretenses I knew would never last

    And you found me
    On that most important night of all
    You made me feel so stupid
    You made me feel so small

    I needed to cry over you
    One last time
    To weed you out
    Of this heart of mine

    And although I miss you now
    I’m glad we’ve gone our separate ways
    And you left me in
    This dreary haze




    Submitted on 2009-10-22 07:20:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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