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    Author: dthforeverpain8
    ASL Info:    17/Female/TMON
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 112/217/289
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 277
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    Everything dwindles to nothing
    And my heart is left
    Genuinely exposed
    With a hole
    Directly in the middle
    Can you see right through?

    And my eyesight is fading
    But I can still see you in front of me
    Clear as the day we met
    And clearer than the day I lost you
    Can you see it?
    See right through?

    This heart, it beats for your acceptance
    But it refuses to pulse
    Without recognition
    The gaping crevice, caused by you
    You're killing me slowly
    Can you see it?

    And as I draw each new breath
    It pains my greatly
    For there is no reason to breathe
    If you are not in the air
    And Im suffocating slowly
    Can you feel it too?





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