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    Author: puppet
    Elite Ratio:    2.12 - 1/2/3
    Words: 215
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Longing
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    she walks through my door and my heart skips a beat,my pulse quickens and my palms get sweaty.she sits down beside me and i look into her eyes and i get dizzy, i have to look away if i dont i will be lost in my feelings,lost in her.
    we talk for long hours and i feel i can tell her anything and she understands,she feels what i am feeling and truly cares.truly feels my pain.
    but does she know how i am starting to feel about her? does she know that i feel her pain and i truly care about her? does she feel the same or am i off on another wild goose chase? am i letting my emotions get the best of me? am i imagining the look she gives me,am i imagining the smile i see on her face when she is near me? i dont know
    she stands to leave and my chest tightens my pulse races and my palms get cold.she wraps her arms around me and i pull her close and i feel at peace,at home,in heaven.




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