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    dots Submission Name: If I got him then why did I lose him?dots
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    Author: PopRocksRae
    ASL Info:    21/ F/ Heaven
    Elite Ratio:    2.49 - 232/369/355
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 601
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 493



    Description:
       still alone inside.
    still drying my eyes.
    still in his arms.
    still missing my heart.


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    dotsIf I got him then why did I lose him?dots
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    I got him.
    so why did I lose him?
    I got the guy I wanted.
    so why did I lose my friend?

    I wanted him.
    I took my chance
    I forgot however.
    what it feels like to dance.

    I love him.
    but I still love him.
    I want to say I'm over it.
    but I'm losing everything.

    If I got him.
    then why did I lose him?
    I got him.
    I just lose my best friend.






    Submitted on 2009-10-22 10:13:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      One would say, great job... But I think great empathy is in order.
    | Posted on 2009-10-26 00:00:00 | by KindredSpirit | [ Reply to This ]


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