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If I got him then why did I lose him?


Author: PopRocksRae
ASL Info:    21/ F/ Heaven
Elite Ratio:    2.49 - 232 /369 /355
Words: 82
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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still alone inside.
still drying my eyes.
still in his arms.
still missing my heart.


If I got him then why did I lose him?



I got him.
so why did I lose him?
I got the guy I wanted.
so why did I lose my friend?

I wanted him.
I took my chance
I forgot however.
what it feels like to dance.

I love him.
but I still love him.
I want to say I'm over it.
but I'm losing everything.

If I got him.
then why did I lose him?
I got him.
I just lose my best friend.






Submitted on 2009-10-22 10:13:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  One would say, great job... But I think great empathy is in order.
| Posted on 2009-10-26 00:00:00 | by KindredSpirit | [ Reply to This ]


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