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Grr.


Author: dismal_s child
ASL Info:    19/F/On A Carousel
Elite Ratio:    3.24 - 451 /419 /172
Words: 74
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Grr.



Ikeepfeelingthetidesofmymoodswingspullingmetosidefromside

I push you away.
No, shove is more accurate.
I shove you away.

Whywouldyoukeepcomingback?Youkeepcomingback,YOUKEEPCOMINGBACK!

It would seem you enjoy this pain.
Masochist.

And though my eyes are shut,
I am not asleep.
I'm trying to forget all the words you speak.

Crushedyetfurioustonescontrastwiththestupidityandfluidityofyourwords.

Yet, I love you.
As I always will.
Forced by some twist of nature,
We are a set.

Likesaltandpepper,orburgersandfries,somehowsomeonesawthatwefittogether.

GOD!





Submitted on 2009-10-22 13:22:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  ooooo....e cummings has nothing on you!!!
| Posted on 2009-11-23 00:00:00 | by ruejacobs | [ Reply to This ]
  totally awsome.
i sound so cheer-leady..."like totally, like wow. like totally freak me out...." whatever. we need to just hang out sometime.
-rachi:)
| Posted on 2009-10-28 00:00:00 | by PopRocksRae | [ Reply to This ]
  this may sound really typical but i like it. it is short and simple and mostly entertaining. i agree with kindredspirit- i don't get what it is about but it catches your attention and overall is a good read. the structure indicates muddled thoughts- not the concept but as if the speaker is confused- loved it :)
| Posted on 2009-10-23 00:00:00 | by darkestlight | [ Reply to This ]
  Haha, I liked it. Once again brilliant. I liked how you braced entire sentences together and... I still didn't get what this was about it. But I liked it none the less.
| Posted on 2009-10-22 00:00:00 | by KindredSpirit | [ Reply to This ]


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