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    dots Submission Name: Grr.dots
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    Author: dismal_s child
    ASL Info:    19/F/On A Carousel
    Elite Ratio:    3.24 - 451/419/172
    Words: 74
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 596
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    dotsGrr.dots
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    Ikeepfeelingthetidesofmymoodswingspullingmetosidefromside

    I push you away.
    No, shove is more accurate.
    I shove you away.

    Whywouldyoukeepcomingback?Youkeepcomingback,YOUKEEPCOMINGBACK!

    It would seem you enjoy this pain.
    Masochist.

    And though my eyes are shut,
    I am not asleep.
    I'm trying to forget all the words you speak.

    Crushedyetfurioustonescontrastwiththestupidityandfluidityofyourwords.

    Yet, I love you.
    As I always will.
    Forced by some twist of nature,
    We are a set.

    Likesaltandpepper,orburgersandfries,somehowsomeonesawthatwefittogether.

    GOD!





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    ||| Comments |||
      ooooo....e cummings has nothing on you!!!
    | Posted on 2009-11-23 00:00:00 | by ruejacobs | [ Reply to This ]
      totally awsome.
    i sound so cheer-leady..."like totally, like wow. like totally freak me out...." whatever. we need to just hang out sometime.
    -rachi:)
    | Posted on 2009-10-28 00:00:00 | by PopRocksRae | [ Reply to This ]
      this may sound really typical but i like it. it is short and simple and mostly entertaining. i agree with kindredspirit- i don't get what it is about but it catches your attention and overall is a good read. the structure indicates muddled thoughts- not the concept but as if the speaker is confused- loved it :)
    | Posted on 2009-10-23 00:00:00 | by darkestlight | [ Reply to This ]
      Haha, I liked it. Once again brilliant. I liked how you braced entire sentences together and... I still didn't get what this was about it. But I liked it none the less.
    | Posted on 2009-10-22 00:00:00 | by KindredSpirit | [ Reply to This ]


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