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To Him (as he sleeps)

Author: dismal_s child
ASL Info:    19/F/On A Carousel
Elite Ratio:    3.24 - 451 /419 /172
Words: 113
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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To Him (as he sleeps)

You are sprawled so lazily, pale in the darkness of our room,
the dust-coated blinds block the sun from disturbing you.
There are words of yours polluting the air,
Like smoke or smog, making me cough,
It's entirely unfair.
Things I just can't understand,
Doubts, and deductions, conclusions, so negative,
But, I never hear an "I can't"
Why must it be about me?
My skills under the 'scope?
You must have some faith in me!
At least that's what I hope.
Now you dream, so lazily.
And I dream, so big.
Tell me what dreams are made of,
and I'll give you a kiss.
You can't? Ha, I win!

Submitted on 2009-10-22 14:22:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Wow. I really think by reading this, I now understand a little more why I sometimes wake to my wife starring daggers at me. Can't you all just let us sleep, that's all it is, nothing more nothing less?!?!

Just kidding... kind of. I did like this post and agree, the end was the best.
| Posted on 2010-02-02 00:00:00 | by Nicholas Lala | [ Reply to This ]
  I felt that it started out strong but then kind of fell off. it seemed like it was lost within itself. I will say the first eight lines are really good.
| Posted on 2009-10-22 00:00:00 | by Darkest Flaw | [ Reply to This ]
  Lol this was great. I loved it, at first it was ok, and moved in with a better understanding. Then the "You can't? Ha, I win!" Lol just awesome. Keep up the write, hope to read more.
| Posted on 2009-10-22 00:00:00 | by KindredSpirit | [ Reply to This ]

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