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You are sprawled so lazily, pale in the darkness of our room, the dust-coated blinds block the sun from disturbing you. There are words of yours polluting the air, Like smoke or smog, making me cough, It's entirely unfair. Things I just can't understand, Doubts, and deductions, conclusions, so negative, But, I never hear an "I can't" Why must it be about me? My skills under the 'scope? You must have some faith in me! At least that's what I hope. Now you dream, so lazily. And I dream, so big. Tell me what dreams are made of, and I'll give you a kiss. You can't? Ha, I win! |
Wow. I really think by reading this, I now understand a little more why I sometimes wake to my wife starring daggers at me. Can't you all just let us sleep, that's all it is, nothing more nothing less?!?! Just kidding... kind of. I did like this post and agree, the end was the best. | Posted on 2010-02-02 00:00:00 | by Nicholas Lala | [ Reply to This ] | I felt that it started out strong but then kind of fell off. it seemed like it was lost within itself. I will say the first eight lines are really good. | | Posted on 2009-10-22 00:00:00 | by Darkest Flaw | [ Reply to This ] | Lol this was great. I loved it, at first it was ok, and moved in with a better understanding. Then the "You can't? Ha, I win!" Lol just awesome. Keep up the write, hope to read more. | | Posted on 2009-10-22 00:00:00 | by KindredSpirit | [ Reply to This ] | |