You are sprawled so lazily, pale in the darkness of our room,
the dust-coated blinds block the sun from disturbing you.
There are words of yours polluting the air,
Like smoke or smog, making me cough,
It's entirely unfair.
Things I just can't understand,
Doubts, and deductions, conclusions, so negative,
But, I never hear an "I can't"
Why must it be about me?
My skills under the 'scope?
You must have some faith in me!
At least that's what I hope.
Now you dream, so lazily.
And I dream, so big.
Tell me what dreams are made of,
and I'll give you a kiss.
You can't? Ha, I win!
| Wow. I really think by reading this, I now understand a little more why I sometimes wake to my wife starring daggers at me. Can't you all just let us sleep, that's all it is, nothing more nothing less?!?!|
Just kidding... kind of. I did like this post and agree, the end was the best.
|| Posted on 2010-02-02 00:00:00 | by Nicholas Lala | [ Reply to This ] || I felt that it started out strong but then kind of fell off. it seemed like it was lost within itself. I will say the first eight lines are really good.||| Posted on 2009-10-22 00:00:00 | by Darkest Flaw | [ Reply to This ] || Lol this was great. I loved it, at first it was ok, and moved in with a better understanding. Then the "You can't? Ha, I win!" Lol just awesome. Keep up the write, hope to read more.||| Posted on 2009-10-22 00:00:00 | by KindredSpirit | [ Reply to This ] |