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    dots Submission Name: Seeing the world through my eyesdots
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    Author: dthforeverpain8
    ASL Info:    15/Female/tmon
    Elite Ratio:    3.36 - 92/158/234
    Words: 234
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 18
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       Damn. i dont know what to saw for myself


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    dotsSeeing the world through my eyesdots
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    Looking up at the world
    I see only fountains of blue
    Like slime and goo
    Polluting my vision
    Have you ever seen the world through my eyes?
    Well, then again neither have I.

    Looking down at the world
    I see only darkness
    A reflection of my soul
    Showing me that I’m a tool
    Have you ever seen the world through my eyes?
    I guess that’s okay, because neither have I.

    Looking at the world through binoculars
    I long to see everything in startling detail
    But the fog of my mind takes over all
    And revokes the details from my sight,
    They’d only hurt me deeper.
    Have you ever seen the world through my eyes?
    They'd see things you’d never imagine
    But then again, neither have I.

    Looking at the world from a distance
    I expect a perfect circle,
    A blue gem in the dark sky
    But the edges have lost their glow
    And all you are is a dangerous spheroid
    Dampening my soul
    My eyes they are my protection
    They are masked by this dark recognition
    Of what I’m becoming
    Keeping me from the lies
    20/20 vision has become my demise
    What can you see?
    I never wanted to watch this fall apart
    Right in front of me

    Have you ever seen the world through my eyes?
    No one has.
    They are my disguise.





    Submitted on 2009-10-23 07:13:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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