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    dots Submission Name: Pieces left Behinddots
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    Author: gothgirl101
    ASL Info:    18/F/Pelham,AL
    Elite Ratio:    1.99 - 10/41/17
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 774
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 408



    Description:
       I write this because i want everyone to know that if you love someone and they don't love you back then it's not true love!


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    dotsPieces left Behinddots
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    The pieces youíve left behind
    Are nothing more than a piece of your mind
    The way you look at me just once more
    Is the way my heart feels when it falls to the floor
    You really donít mean much too me again
    Things are the same as they were when we were friends
    You didnít care and you donít now
    So like rhianna says you can take a bow!





    Submitted on 2009-10-23 08:00:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hi there. Well I read your recent poem after I commented on the first one and I find a wonderful sensitive mind at play with words that not only rhymes well and is an expression of inner feeling that has a true color. Well done. I liked it. luv jm.
    | Posted on 2009-12-08 00:00:00 | by Joachim | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this. You are right if the other person love you back it is not true love.

    Mimi
    | Posted on 2009-10-23 00:00:00 | by mimis043 | [ Reply to This ]


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