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    dots Submission Name: What You Aredots
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    Author: Diablo Tapitio
    ASL Info:    30
    Elite Ratio:    3.08 - 85/111/62
    Words: 160
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
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    dotsWhat You Aredots
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    I see the ambition swimming in your eyes,
    I also see your demons, and your secret little lies.
    I know you well baby, i know how you are,
    you are only a normal person, who thinks they are a star.
    I dont want to be so cold, but ice flows in my veins,
    i dont want be an asshole, but mean is my game.

    So keep your empty logic, and your false promises to,
    you would love to think i am lying, but you know my words are true,
    so convince yourself your happy, convince yourself I am wrong,
    but you have givin me enough pain, to write a million country songs.

    so numb yourself with denial, and judge them as you did me,
    there are far too many fishes, in this cold sea
    and I am a good fisherman when I want to be,
    I cannot be your slave, I broke my chains, I am free.




    Submitted on 2009-10-23 14:57:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this is all very matter of fact like its whats happening and you cant stop the force from within either hear it or fear it like an ultimatum to end all ultimatums, but did you not see any good in this person/these people. its good to get out negativity. but you should be concrete about yourself and your path/movements.
    "and I am a good fisherman when I want to be"
    thats still like saying(in my opinion) theres a switch in my brain that gets turned off. like a disconnect. like you are two different people.
    be one person. the person that sees the good. and then those positive vibes will attract what you are trying to manifest.
    | Posted on 2009-10-24 00:00:00 | by ghad | [ Reply to This ]


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