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    dots Submission Name: My Own Helldots
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    Author: InsanityVanity
    ASL Info:    16/male/noneyah
    Elite Ratio:    2.64 - 7/9/18
    Words: 226
    Class/Type: Poetry/Sorry
    Total Views: 38
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1469



    Description:
       We all regret something we've done.
    from what i deserve i will not run.


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    dotsMy Own Helldots
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    Shall it be said
    When I am dead
    I’ve found a way
    To keep my head
    I like it best
    This peaceful rest
    My will bequest
    I wait by those
    In heavens nest
    I look down upon
    Where I’m now gone
    From the world
    I once was fond
    Now at this gate
    I stand and wait
    For how long will
    This moment take
    Now the time
    Has come to pass
    But I will not
    be allowed to pass
    I kick and thrash
    Fall down a shaft
    Which at the bottom
    My ass is grass
    They sound the bell
    My soul has fell
    Tormented in
    What’s known as hell
    The things I’ve done
    To buy this cell
    I’ll never tell
    This pain in vain
    I hold my shell
    I do deserve
    this time I serve
    To circle through
    This endless curve
    My deeds so wrong
    I now must hear
    The devils song
    Which hurts my ear
    Sounding so strong
    Lasting so long
    I feel it through
    The fun they make
    My heart they take
    My soul they break
    Blood forms a lake
    Complaining not
    This pain I sought
    To get what I got
    My actions brought
    My soul will rot
    I feel the pain
    But will not die
    I’ll never die
    And never cry
    You wonder why
    I made this hell
    I will not lie




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    ||| Comments |||
      I enjoyed this. I may be completely off, but a topic that comes through for me is accepting what you've sown, so to speak. We may not be wanting to accept it, but in the end, we have to realize, we all get what we deserve. My only issue is the format, but that's a personal issue.
    | Posted on 2009-10-23 00:00:00 | by waitwhat | [ Reply to This ]


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