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    dots Submission Name: with you, without you.dots
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    Author: locutus
    Elite Ratio:    4.21 - 29/34/35
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Love
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       very simple, thoughts.


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    dotswith you, without you.dots
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    my lonely mother,
    face of endless travel,
    smile withered and torn,
    body battered by the harsh climate,
    yet you are soo bold.
    i love you for the promise you gave me,
    found hope in a pool of tar,
    you have soo little to give yet i feel complete.
    took my hand when i was lost and hungry, then gave me a place to stay.
    you are so warm.
    tonight i sleep without you, waiting for the day to come.
    all that i can offer is my life, take it as you wish.




    Submitted on 2009-10-24 01:16:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Never give your parents your life. Just... trust me, don't.

    Secondly, this is really a pretty piece, very heartfelt and all those good adjectives that I won't go into and drone on about. I liked it all but the ending, obviously.
    | Posted on 2009-10-24 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]
      family is at the heart of most people. we live for them, they bring us joy and sometimes sadness. but they are always connected to you. you can always go to them for comfort protection and advice to say the least of the many things your family does for you and you for them. i also feel that my mother and father are such strong people they inspire me to be who i am. they drive me to success and show how to learn from failure. they all ways have the best intentions for me and with out them i'd be lost.

    peace
    | Posted on 2009-10-24 00:00:00 | by ghad | [ Reply to This ]


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